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第1607期英文写作擂台赛[2013年4月11日】

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发表于 2013-4-10 23:06:04 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
第1607期英文写作擂台赛[2013年4月11日】
TOPIC:Some people think that the family is the most important influence on young adults. Other people think that friends are the most important influence on young adults. Which view do you agree with? Use examples to support your position.

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第二段的,because you are too much trouble. 这句话不太恰当,太chinese 化了,改成because you make too much trouble to them 会不会更好呢。  发表于 2013-4-12 17:09

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参与人数 2金钱 +25 收起 理由
xiaobuding2 + 10 很给力!
Cici Zhu + 15 不错。

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发表于 2013-4-10 23:18:57 | 显示全部楼层
工 WANT  TO SEE HOW TO WRITE
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发表于 2013-4-11 14:45:27 | 显示全部楼层
i think that the family is the most important influence on young adults
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发表于 2013-4-11 23:09:38 | 显示全部楼层
Thanks for sharing
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发表于 2013-4-12 14:46:17 | 显示全部楼层
I want to learn how to write
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发表于 2013-4-12 17:04:02 | 显示全部楼层
本帖最后由 Cici Zhu 于 2013-4-12 17:07 编辑


Family factors shape the personality of young adults

The discussion that family is the most influence on youngadults or friends are the most important influence on young adults has initiated heated discuss for a long time among people from all ranks of life, rangingfrom expects to students themselves. Also, people try to figure out a unanimousanswer. Regretfully, people had never reached a unanimous opinion on this debateand the debate is continuing. Personally speaking, I think that family factors arethe most important influence on young adults for family education and background shape the personality of young adults.

As we all know, childhood is the golden time to shape personality and the behaviors of parents and family education influences children directly. Some parents think that teachers and schools are mostly responsible for children’s education especially more and more and more parentstend to send their baby to kindergarten or school earlier. However, before entering schools, children already know some simple moral standards such asrespect the old which they learned from their parents. And the most important factoris that the education in China emphasizes more on the academic teaching insteadof moral guidance. And when a child make a mistake, schools usually talk withthe parents about the moral guidance of child to parents instead of taking their responsibility, which indicating that schools advocate parents are responsible to guide the behavior of children. Thus, if parents neglect the moral guidance tochildren, children are possibly missing their way when growing up.

Second, I would like to emphasize on the significance of family background to young adults. Everyone would experience a time called teenager when we are rebellious towards the planning of our parents for we wantto decide what we like by ourselves at this period. However, the immature thinking ways and impulsive character would lead to some misleading at this period. Undeniable, teenager can be the second time to shape one’s character inone’s life at a higher level. Our world value and many important values related to life is formed and developed at this time. In most cases, we are in oursenior high school when friends play a very important role in our life. While we make friends by preference, that is, we make friends with the people whomake us feel pleasure which is decided by the personality of two parties. Thereis an old saying goes “People of a mind fall into a group.” We can learn from this proverb that it is our personality determines our friends, not our friends would have a great influence on us.

What’s more, young adults who don’t have a happy family life seem to change their personality even after 18 years old. Also, personal experience would directly influence characters too. All in all, some precious characteristic such as perseverance, optimistic, considerate ect. is formed at ouryoung age. Our friends and later life experience just helps us to understand them better.

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你这,这么强,让我们还怎么写哦?  详情 回复 发表于 2013-4-15 11:46
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发表于 2013-4-12 17:12:06 | 显示全部楼层

真的很感谢大耳朵给我提供了这样一个提高自己写作水平的平台,我基本上算是一个懒人吧。


我不会主动去做一些事情,但是有目标的话或者有平台会好点,我现在的工作真的不允许我现在这样的词汇量和写作水平,太糟糕了。希望长期的坚持能给自己带来提高。
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发表于 2013-4-13 22:49:05 | 显示全部楼层
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发表于 2013-4-15 11:46:11 | 显示全部楼层
Cici Zhu 发表于 2013-4-12 17:04
Family factors shape the personality of young adults
The discussion that family is the most influe ...

你这,这么强,让我们还怎么写哦?

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:'(一起提高啊我也是来提高的。。。我只是写的比较长,你仔细看我的用词等,很一般的水平的。  详情 回复 发表于 2013-4-15 15:26
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发表于 2013-4-15 15:26:38 | 显示全部楼层
琵琶金翠羽 发表于 2013-4-15 11:46
你这,这么强,让我们还怎么写哦?



:'(一起提高啊我也是来提高的。。。我只是写的比较长,你仔细看我的用词等,很一般的水平的。
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发表于 2013-4-16 17:31:01 | 显示全部楼层
学习学习
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发表于 2013-4-19 19:31:17 | 显示全部楼层
怎么没多少人写啊
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